The Coupler (Friday Fictioneers)

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She had to tell him. Today.  She couldn’t chicken out this time.   It was over, they both knew it.  She couldn’t keep living like this.  She wanted out.

They sat in the car at the railroad crossing, delayed by the train.  Car after car passed. Monotony.  She suddenly noticed the couplers, holding the cars together securely but with enough give that each could adjust to the turns of the track.  What if the coupler broke?  Massive derailment? Or easy separation, two cars moving slowly apart on the rails?

She was about to find out.

Deep breath.

“We need to talk.”

[100 words]


This was written for Friday Fictioneers – hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields – a weekly photo prompt and a story in 100 words or less.

Photo credit: Jennifer Pendergast

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38 thoughts on “The Coupler (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Dear Annie,

    I thought this was a perfect representation of the emotions felt by someone approaching that pivotal moment on the tracks of life. A seamless and slick story. Good job.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  2. I love the link between breaking up and the couplers failing. You set the scene beautifully, both sitting there, not sure what to say and putting off saying it, latching onto every little distraction…
    Those four little words – “We need to talk” always make my blood run cold 🙂

  3. I love the way this is both a metaphor AND a real story.
    A lot of clever touches like that one word sentence – Monotony.
    Good story. Left me thinking about the choices we make.

  4. I love the way your story flows, Amie. You make the link between the couplers and two people on the verge of breaking up extremely well. Very well written. 🙂

  5. It’s been said above, but the monotony of the trains, one carriage after another, riding together on the fixed line… great representation of the troubled (doomed) relationship. Nice work.
    Cheers
    KT

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