In the Line of Fire (Friday Fictioneers)

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She watched the news coverage of the house fire with a growing sense of dread. She loved Tim with all her soul, but she never loved his choice of profession.  Five years as a firefighter’s wife, she still worried about him constantly.

Her stomach sank when the phone rang.  Structural collapse.  Her world flew into chaos.

Distraught, she raced to the hospital, bargaining the whole way. Please don’t take him away from me. I’ll do anything.

Connected to tubes and machines, he was battered but alive.

He gave her a weak smile. Overcome, she folded into his chest and wept.

[100 words]


Photo copyright: Roger Bultot

This one was hard for me.  There was so much more that I wanted to say so keeping it at 100 words was a real challenge. Does it work? Yes, no, maybe?

This was written for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Love flash fiction? Join us for a weekly photo prompt and create your own story in 100 words or less.  Click here and click the blue froggy button to read the other stories.

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28 thoughts on “In the Line of Fire (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Very moving. A lot of emotion in 100 little words, but you did it well. The interesting thing about this one, is it didn’t feel like it needed to keep going (like the train, I NEED to know how their talk went) but this one, I feel like with his weak smile, he’ll be ok. It’ll be a bumpy road to recovery, but in the end he’ll be ok. You know?

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    1. Yes! That was what I was going for. She was so scared and nervous but she saw the smile and knew that he would be ok (eventually) and then the emotions came flooding out. But yes, the weak smile tells us that in the end, he’ll be ok.

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  2. Good story, Amie, with good description of emotion. My dad was a fireman for thiry-three years untill he retired as a Captain. Thank goodness he was never injured in doing his job. He loved his job, and my mother accepted the possibility of him being injured. Well done. — Suzanne

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    1. Thanks, Suzanne. That’s wonderful that your dad had such a long and successful career and supportive family. First responders are amazing people. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  3. This was a lovely reponse to the prompt, Amie. I could really feel the wife’s emotion. My niece is married to a fireman, and she’s almost a nervous wreck whenever he’s called out to any major fire. Very well written.

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      1. It’s one of those things you don’t really get used to because each occasion presents another threat, Right, I’m going to stop being morbid now! Have a lovely evening, Amie.

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  4. Fire is one of the most terrifying things and firefighters so brave. Being married to one must be like being married to a soldier who has gone to fight on the front line. You must live in constant dread of him not returning from duty, or ending up badly injured. One of my friends used to be a firefighter who specialised in electrical fires; he once saw one of his comrades so badly burned that his rubber boots ended up welded to his skin. My friend is now retired, which I’m sure pleases his wife.

    Your story conveys so well that feeling of a worst dread realised.

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